Peer review went just fantastic.
Most the suggestions I recieved were things to revise things I had planned to revise anyhow, but didn't have the time to before.
Strengths are the solid facts that I cite in the paper and how they are presented. I don't really have any questions or concerns, if I come up with anything I'll be sure to dispatch an email immediately.
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Hi Jason,
You have a great start and a clear direction for where you are taking this essay which is great!
As far as revisions, take a look at the beginning of page two. This seemed like a great place to bring in another outside piece of evidence to support your point. Also, consider reworking your thesis so that the reader is 100% sure what your stance is on the topic. You make the topic very clear in the introduction, but there could be some ambiguity as far as your stance is concerned.
You also have a great start with MLA and almost have the citations down. Periods should go after parenthetical citations rather than before and reexamine your works cited page. I wondered why the first citation's website was in all caps.
Keep working and let me know if you have any questions along the way.
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